tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post4949011522047487830..comments2023-08-27T03:39:21.287-05:00Comments on This, That... The Other Thing: Home LateTomara Armstronghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17185889402088565686noreply@blogger.comBlogger29125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-48897293226236496142010-08-13T08:35:36.346-05:002010-08-13T08:35:36.346-05:00Outstanding. Such sweetness in the opening and hor...Outstanding. Such sweetness in the opening and horror in the close.A Writer's Veinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05112294778762654630noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-50318129220744936952010-08-12T23:21:40.229-05:002010-08-12T23:21:40.229-05:00Such a powerful piece. The tension and characteris...Such a powerful piece. The tension and characterisation are supreb so I will echo the thoughts of others and encourage you to finish the novel. Taut description and clever angles to get the idea across.<br />Adam B @revhappinessAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-91156191638459518822010-08-12T09:36:06.899-05:002010-08-12T09:36:06.899-05:00Excellent work, Tomara. This is one of the best pi...Excellent work, Tomara. This is one of the best pieces of flash I've read in a very long time - from anyone. You really nailed this. The hand holding at the end was so so poignant. I really feel for these kids.<br />~jonJ. M. Strotherhttp://www.jmstrother.com/MadUtopia/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-5033683333308829842010-07-25T12:57:48.499-05:002010-07-25T12:57:48.499-05:00Tomara, well-written. You really feel for the twi...Tomara, well-written. You really feel for the twins, especially with the contrast of the guitar lesson to the violence that waits them at home.AidanFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09876041003278004627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-16187137506959713652010-07-25T08:32:54.302-05:002010-07-25T08:32:54.302-05:00Wonderful story, Tomara. Great from the get-go. Yo...Wonderful story, Tomara. Great from the get-go. Your twins are thoroughly interesting - and I'm interested in seeing what they do next.Cathy Olliffe-Websterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12729578896443750402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-28822420287215216902010-07-25T04:56:31.903-05:002010-07-25T04:56:31.903-05:00A powerful piece that really captures the relation...A powerful piece that really captures the relationship between the twins in the little details. Definitely hooked enough to want to read more about Nate and Natalie.dan powellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14131553102349479513noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-32121183039871609642010-07-24T19:58:12.198-05:002010-07-24T19:58:12.198-05:00This is really tramatic and excellent, 2! I'm ...This is really tramatic and excellent, 2! I'm with Kevin...hurry up and finish your novel!Laura Enohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09982794146667832204noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-35823031301545948362010-07-24T18:33:00.243-05:002010-07-24T18:33:00.243-05:00Pretty good!Pretty good!Eric Johnsonhttp://www.facebook.com/EricJ56noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-17427209367510952042010-07-24T12:56:43.745-05:002010-07-24T12:56:43.745-05:00Like others have said, probably the tightest thing...Like others have said, probably the tightest thing here is the hand-holding at the end. For all that he'll wish they had gotten home early, it probably saved their lives. Still, he'll always wonder, and that definitely defines a character. Good work.Valeriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14148970927473800732noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-49480698635240839842010-07-24T12:51:09.266-05:002010-07-24T12:51:09.266-05:00This is excellent, a really taut, tense read. To e...This is excellent, a really taut, tense read. To evoke that in a reader from the humble placing of words on a page/screen is a mighty gift. & you've got it!<br /><br />Marc NashSulci Collectivehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03293833259808943096noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-52029454471794364742010-07-24T12:45:02.346-05:002010-07-24T12:45:02.346-05:00I like Kemari's praise best of all. Got to bel...I like Kemari's praise best of all. Got to believe in yourself, 2mara, and keep those two together.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-33471841934146361022010-07-24T12:25:58.693-05:002010-07-24T12:25:58.693-05:00That was intense! On the one hand, it's good ...That was intense! On the one hand, it's good they were late, on the other , what will happen to Nate and Natalie now? I need more...sequel? Please.Samhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00361651251233078437noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-12730854995718731712010-07-24T11:32:11.971-05:002010-07-24T11:32:11.971-05:00Excellent. Love the all-for-one dynamic of the twi...Excellent. Love the all-for-one dynamic of the twins. <br /><br />Can't wait to read more about them.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04421752061801543297noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-30774066438190214672010-07-24T11:32:03.734-05:002010-07-24T11:32:03.734-05:00Wow, what a great story. I'm joining the choru...Wow, what a great story. I'm joining the chorus-- go finish this novel. It will be amazing.<br /><br />Excellent writing, and the characters just jump off the page. I'm so glad they were late getting home.<br /><br />Amazing work.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-1274318123796281752010-07-24T11:23:34.879-05:002010-07-24T11:23:34.879-05:00Vivid descriptions, good pacing, powerful ending. ...Vivid descriptions, good pacing, powerful ending. The reader can sense the guilt Nate feels for missing the bus. You did a good job with this one.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08236529774839136879noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-90134005624019738182010-07-24T10:41:01.575-05:002010-07-24T10:41:01.575-05:00Beautifully, written. Very powerful piece.
My da...Beautifully, written. Very powerful piece. <br /><br />My daughter is reading #fridayflash with me this morning and she said to tell you that she absolutely loved it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-76963304256358013792010-07-24T08:16:41.822-05:002010-07-24T08:16:41.822-05:00Good job they were late - murder and triple suicid...Good job they were late - murder and triple suicide otherwise, no doubt.<br /><br />Very tense when they got to their house, the non existent fire particularlymazzz in Leedshttp://mazzz-in-leeds.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-34599654317497748922010-07-24T04:42:18.101-05:002010-07-24T04:42:18.101-05:00Wow, I am amazed to wake up to so many comments. T...Wow, I am amazed to wake up to so many comments. Thank you guys always for reading and commenting.<br /><br />Kevin - That is such an honor coming from you. I am a HUGE fan of yours.<br /><br />Ryan - Thank you for being so supportive and all of the awesome word spreading.<br /><br />RaShelle - Shush, you. Thanks :-) I am working on it.<br /><br />Kemari - it was all of your editing that they love. You always make it better :-P Thanks for being awesome.<br /><br />Marisa - You always leave the best comments. I was just telling Kemari about that in IM earlier. <br /><br />David - Thank you so much. I am glad it came across well. I always have it so well written in my head, but I don't always translate as well.<br /><br />Pamila - sorry for the late night trickery. I corrected the typo ;-). Thanks for pointing it out, I was spent by the time I posted this last night. <br /><br />jdanetyler - Nate and Natalie have plenty of backstory, which is nuts because neither is the MC in my novel. I spend too much time thinking about things and too little writing.<br /><br />Eric - It was a good thing they were late, but sadly I don't think they always see it that way. <br /><br />Ant - if I can get you to waiver, I have succeeded. *pumps fist in the air* <br /><br />Again, thank you all so much for reading and commenting.<br /><3<br />~2Tomara Armstronghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17185889402088565686noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-57663169514110980412010-07-24T00:52:44.642-05:002010-07-24T00:52:44.642-05:00This was incredible. That lil' guy got me in t...This was incredible. That lil' guy got me in the end, 2...Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11413377601369107260noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-32238657316514524542010-07-24T00:17:20.918-05:002010-07-24T00:17:20.918-05:00This is a powerful story indeed! Good thing they w...This is a powerful story indeed! Good thing they were late. Many great elements in this.Eric J. Krausehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05774468607814244185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-17385776308226076402010-07-23T23:23:42.677-05:002010-07-23T23:23:42.677-05:00Incredibly powerful and very emotive. These are ch...Incredibly powerful and very emotive. These are characters I want to know more about, want to follow.<br /><br />Excellent job with a tight vignette; so much conveyed. Well done!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-48729851922035894422010-07-23T22:47:01.307-05:002010-07-23T22:47:01.307-05:00This comment has been removed by the author.Pamila Paynehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14398900249578356483noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-52010447156966843592010-07-23T22:47:00.862-05:002010-07-23T22:47:00.862-05:00Good thing they were late. You lulled me into thin...Good thing they were late. You lulled me into thinking this was a feel good childhood nostalgia piece at first... then, wham. Very nice build up, you really see how these two are bonded at the end. One small typo - last sentence, "office" should be "officer?"Pamila Paynehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14398900249578356483noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-81547666842529083872010-07-23T22:29:56.480-05:002010-07-23T22:29:56.480-05:00Tight pull at the end. The hand holding issue defi...Tight pull at the end. The hand holding issue defines this story, and the "weird" remark quickly sets the characters. Nice.David G Shrockhttp://www.dracotorre.com/blog/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1070373468566489260.post-82267807952270689152010-07-23T22:27:16.475-05:002010-07-23T22:27:16.475-05:00Oh, this was so incredibly and wonderfully good!
...Oh, this was so incredibly and wonderfully good!<br /><br />Teary when Nate held hands with his sister at the end, not caring who saw.<br /><br />Excellent. Now go, go. Finish your novel. :)Marisa Birnshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17945909737147497606noreply@blogger.com